haiku-usa

A blog devoted mainly to haiku and senryu and to thoughts about, and inspired by, haiku and senryu.

Haiku is to poetry as espresso is to coffee.

Sunday, October 09, 2005

young voices laugh

across the plaza

crisp brown leaves

stiff wind

across the plaza

two girls dance

long shadows

point toward the Hudson

checking my watch

floots said...: What a great triptych (I felt they merited the term!)
All three capture an urban scene beautifully but the third is my personal favourite. It's a great piece of naturalistic description (It's getting late: what time is it?) but it also has that feeling/implication that evenings and shadows are time checks for us all. Or should I just shut up and pass the bottle? Cheers; 1:22 AM
Bill said...: Floots: thanks so much. Your reading, as usual, is astute and imaginative.The implication you mention is certainly there. In fact, though, it didn't occur to me consciously until I looked for the first time at what I had written.; 11:23 AM
Anonymous Poet said...: Ever observant, aren't you? Pulling little gems out of every day life.

BTW: Can I get some of whatever floots is drinking?; 9:24 AM
Bill said...: anon: I'm afraid I'm not authorized to act as a dealer, but thanks for your visit.; 7:08 PM