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Monday, December 19, 2011

teenagers

winter solstice
the teenagers make a vow
for now

(Jumping the gun by a few days, I know. In spite of the kigo, this feels more like senryu to me. Maybe it's haikyu or senryku.)

6 Comments:

Blogger Monika said...

Hi Bill,

never mind if it's haiku or senryĆ» - it's good ! (But to me, too, it looks like senryĆ».)

5:18 PM  
Blogger John McDonald said...

nice one Bill
john

12:33 AM  
Blogger Magyar said...

How well put!
__Teenagers -a vow... for now.-

_m

10:07 AM  
Blogger Bill said...

thanks, Monika, John, and Doug.

2:23 PM  
Blogger Ramesh Sood said...

A vow for Now.. beautiful Bill if we all could do that.. yes.

And thanks for your feedback. will take care.. infact I tried in my next post a little purer juxtaposition.. have a look here Bill and would love to know if I show improvement..

http://rameshsood.blogspot.com/2011/12/stale-fruits-cold-dreams.html

10:25 PM  
Blogger HaikuKelly said...

I agree, who cares which category it technically falls into. If it speaks an element of truth, it works. Having worked with teens for years, I think this poem (whatever it is) works. Nicely done!

1:10 PM  

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